Preach's Character App

Name:Preach

Race:Half Saiyan

Racial Trait: Zenkai - After a fight you gain 20% of your opponenets powerlevel

Age:18

Appearance:

Personlaity:Preach is the Leader of the G Fighters. They protect their planet Earth and fight to death no matter what happens. Preach has 3 brothers and 2 Foster brothers. He has a girlfriend named Kimmi who fight to stop tryants.

Preach can also learn from his ancestors and what the struggled to keep his confidence up, to help him defeat his enemies. Preach is also the Half Saiyan type who has confidence to win battles. Preach isn't noticed as a hero who fights villains on national television, he is noticed as someone who can beat group enemies.

Starting Planet: Earth

Abilities:Kamehamea
Preach forms a Full Powered Wave but blue.
Preach learned this attack by training with Master Roshi 6 years ago.

Super Kamehameha
Preach forms a Full Powered Wave but blue and more stronger.
Preach learned this attack by his brothers 5 years ago.

Stealth Bomber
Preach snap vanishes into the sky, and fires seven big energy waves, without it being sensed or heard. It can be used after 3 turns.
This is a custom attack Preach learned at the age of 7 he fire ki blasts with it being sensed or heared.

History: Preach was born on Earth, his real parents died by Androids. Before his dad died, he put him at the World Martial Arts Tournament. Preach copied all the great martial artist, but he beat them. Preach was told by a stranger to see Master Roshi. When heading to Master Roshi's place, Preach forgot the way so he told Master Shen. Master Shen wanted to kill Preach, but he flew to Master Roshi's Island, and Roshi fired a Kamehameha wave at Master Shen. Preach decided to train with Master Roshi, he learned Kamehameha and Super Kamehameha.

Two years later Preach was adopted, he went to live with Tenma and Harima, who took good care of him. Preach also trained by Dero and Kero, sons of Harima and Tenma, at their age they could turn Super Saiyan. Preach died after facing the Troublness Gang, he was sent by King Yemma to run Snake Way and learn by Zento. Preach laughed at Zento for being lonley. Preach now was even stronger he was able to compete in the world tournament. Preach met his real dad and mum, who were suprised Preach was killed. Preach faced his dad and friend Yukai. Preach also faced B.E.A.D(Blue Epic Army Destroyers). At that time Preach met Kimmi and went to put her dad down.

Rp Sample:The Earth was a peacefull place but when every enemy that Goku faced teamed up and broke the barrier of hell to kill him. The teams were, Cell, Frieza and Super Buu. Janemba and Broly. Cooler and Dabura. All others teamed up too! Goku and the Z Fighters were frightened that they were going to be killed. But Goku had no worry, that since his already defeated them he can defeat them again.

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"Racial Trait: Confindence - Preach has the power to get stronger every time he battles." That is not a sayian racial trait to chose from. The racial traits to chose from are here. https://dbzs.rpg-board.net/races-f48/saiyan-race-includes-1-2-saiyan-t26.htm

On the template it clearly states

Personlaity:1 paragraphs at least.

History: 2 paragraphs at least.

"Personlaity:Preach is the Leader of the G Fighters who protect their planet and fight to death no matter what happens. Preach has 3 brothers and 2 Foster brothers. He has a girlfriend named Kimmi who fight to stop tryants.

Preach can also learn from his ancestors and what the struggled to keep his confidence up, to help him defeat his enemies"

This is not a paragraph.

"Preach was born on Earth, his real parents died by Androids, before his dad died, he put him at the World Martial Arts Tournament, so Preach decided to train. He was looking for Master Roshi, he trained by him. Preach was later adopted.

Preach faced all sorts of enemies, the B.E.A.D, Android Hell Raisers and Kimmi's Dad. So he begins to form a team with his foster brothers , his friends and girlfriend and for the ultimate team named G Fighters."

And this most certainly isn't two paragraphs.

A paragraph consists of 5-7 full sentences if your still in middle school. High school it tends to be the same however for us collage kids it was 9-12 sentences was a paragraph. Your history and personality both fail to meet even the middle school standards. ADD TO THEM otherwise this application will remain denied.

thanks for the help majeh was wondering why Ive never seen that racial trait before

Majeh wrote:

Denied

"Racial Trait: Confindence - Preach has the power to get stronger every time he battles." That is not a sayian racial trait to chose from. The racial traits to chose from are here. https://dbzs.rpg-board.net/races-f48/saiyan-race-includes-1-2-saiyan-t26.htm

On the template it clearly states

Personlaity:1 paragraphs at least.

History: 2 paragraphs at least.

"Personlaity:Preach is the Leader of the G Fighters who protect their planet and fight to death no matter what happens. Preach has 3 brothers and 2 Foster brothers. He has a girlfriend named Kimmi who fight to stop tryants.

Preach can also learn from his ancestors and what the struggled to keep his confidence up, to help him defeat his enemies"

This is not a paragraph.

"Preach was born on Earth, his real parents died by Androids, before his dad died, he put him at the World Martial Arts Tournament, so Preach decided to train. He was looking for Master Roshi, he trained by him. Preach was later adopted.

Preach faced all sorts of enemies, the B.E.A.D, Android Hell Raisers and Kimmi's Dad. So he begins to form a team with his foster brothers , his friends and girlfriend and for the ultimate team named G Fighters."

And this most certainly isn't two paragraphs.

A paragraph consists of 5-7 full sentences if your still in middle school. High school it tends to be the same however for us collage kids it was 9-12 sentences was a paragraph. Your history and personality both fail to meet even the middle school standards. ADD TO THEM otherwise this application will remain denied.

I don't even know what Middle school is or what age, because I'm from UK, not US, so I'm in secondary School 11-16 and I'm in Year 7.

regardless of where your from, make your app acceptable, like he stated. dont waste our time trying to get out of it without making your app decent.

}V{ajin )3uu wrote:

regardless of where your from, make your app acceptable, like he stated. dont waste our time trying to get out of it without making your app decent.

I've edited. Check.

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